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Post  x_Madi_x on Mon Mar 18, 2013 3:57 pm

Please check it out. c:




http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/CamilliaSaysSo./969599/

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Post  milly4life on Mon Mar 18, 2013 11:05 pm

Wow, this is amazing. you do an your really good with making plots and having the story line flow in a nice neat way.
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Post  Inv3rt3d on Tue Mar 19, 2013 11:47 am

The story's intro has told about the main character and her background and hasn't jumped into the story yet. From there, introduce a few more characters and a bit of dialogue until you're ready for a big event in the story. You have some good language, swearing only gives further emphasis. Good job on the story so far. The funny thing is that Psiiche is the main character.
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Re: My Writing ~ I need opinions.

Post  swingingkings on Tue Mar 19, 2013 12:41 pm

Spelling check list:
" I got to him for everything"

It's nice so far, Just watch for spelling and grammar errors.
It has a catchy start, but seems to drift away towards the end.
I kinda got confused when you started using "Drew" for his name, just make sure you make it clear.

All i have to say atm Razz

Goodluck xD
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Post  x_Madi_x on Tue Mar 19, 2013 12:59 pm

Inv3rt3d wrote:The story's intro has told about the main character and her background and hasn't jumped into the story yet. From there, introduce a few more characters and a bit of dialogue until you're ready for a big event in the story. You have some good language, swearing only gives further emphasis. Good job on the story so far. The funny thing is that Psiiche is the main character.

Thanks! I love the advice, and I'll be sure to take it. c:

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Post  x_Madi_x on Tue Mar 19, 2013 1:00 pm

swingingkings wrote:Spelling check list:
" I got to him for everything"

It's nice so far, Just watch for spelling and grammar errors.
It has a catchy start, but seems to drift away towards the end.
I kinda got confused when you started using "Drew" for his name, just make sure you make it clear.

All i have to say atm Razz

Goodluck xD
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Thankkk youuu. :DD I'll work on it.

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